I liked the second review for our RA better than the first. I liked how there was more than one view point when we were reviewing our paper. I also liked how we had more time to actually read and think about what we are going to say. I really liked all the comments written down on the paper. The extra time to look at the other papers was definitely the thing I appreciated the most.
One thing I liked better about the Opinion Editorial review was that it was one on one and we could go into more detail. I don't know if I feel that way because I was the last one to go for the RA but I felt like I talked more about my questions about what the other person was saying with the first.
Tone: She uses quotes and words to make the end of the blog post uplifting and inspiring. It makes the reader want to do something to change.
"You hear that Gandhi quote thrown around all of the time: "Be the change you wish to see in the world." So, it starts with me."
Pictures: She uses the pictures that she is arguing against to prove her point that we really shouldn't care about being "perfect." It creates a negative feeling towards them
Rhetorical questions: She asks why does our weight matter so much to the world, and what can we do to change it.
She describes her awkward years so that we can picture it and we know what she was going through.
“Food For Thought” is an effective argument to persuade
women to see their bodies as beautiful how they are and not try to make their bodies
something that they cant be. It uses pictures to draw emotions, personal
stories, and strong words to create a feeling that what we see in the mirror is
not what matters most.
So these are my three ideas for my Rhetorical Analysis.
The first one is about how we should be proud of our body and that it doesn't matter what our weight is. She is talking to all girls, not just the ones who have trouble with their weight.
This one the writer is a Member of the Church. He is writing to other members of the church saying that we should be kinder and less judgmental. It is a really good paper.
This third one is a girl who is trying to prove that she isn't a hipster. It is kinda hilarious. She is mainly talking to her friends who have been giving her a hard time lately.
I liked my topic for my Opinion Editorial but I had so many ideas for it that it was hard to connect them sometimes. The Writing Center really helped me, and I kind of wish that I had gone earlier because it would have saved me from some frustration. Having other look at my work was also very helpful. The peer review went well. I don't like expressing my opinions on things so this paper was a challenge for me at times. But most of the time I really enjoyed writing it and the blog part of it made it so much better. I have decided that like blog posts a lot better than writing a paper.
Here is one more Marching Band video. Hope you enjoy!
Music helps with learning and in many other aspects
of everyday life. Every child, especially LDS children, growing up needs to be
in some sort of music program: for example, band, orchestra, choir or private
lessons. Being involved helps them learn faster and become well rounded
children. Music inspires people and lets them express their emotions. It is
vital part of our lives as members of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints.
Music enhances creativity and helps them learn and understand. Music
Educators Journal, September, 2000 says,
“On the 1999 SAT, music students continue to outperform their non-arts peers,
scoring 61 points higher on the verbal portion and 42 points higher on the math
portion of the exam.” There are many
stories of this type of thing happening. People who play music often find
patterns in problems that others would not notice. They come up with more
creative and efficient ways to remember and find answers. Finding patterns—a
common method musicians use—helps students with learning math, which is often
one of the hardest subjects for students.
One argument that many make against learning how to
play an instrument is that there is time taken out of class to learn that could
be used for other subjects. However, United Musical Instruments USA, Inc.,
1995 says, “A study showed
student absence from class to study a musical instrument does not result in
lower academic achievement. They found
no difference in academic achievement between sixth grade students who were
excused from class for instrumental study and those who were not, matching
variables of sex, race, IQ, cumulative achievement, school attended, and
classroom teacher.” This study shows that even though these students took time
out to go play the instrument, they can easily still keep up with the other
students.
It is obvious that learning how to play an instrument has no negative
effect on the overall learning experience. In fact, it actually improves
children’s learning abilities. It aids in brain functioning because playing
music uses various brain functions at the same time. Hearing, sight, memory,
and motor control are used every time you play an instrument. In Marching Band
you must learn well how to memorize the pieces you play. If you don’t have your
music memorized, it is hard to play and march at the same time. Multi-tasking is
a skill that uses more of your brain. The year in high school that I didn’t do
marching band was the hardest year for me to memorize because I did not have
the practice that had had before.
This is my roommate at a talent show. She was playing a piece that she had memorized a few years before.
Because music helps with memory, teachers may make up songs to help
memorize something. In one of my high school math classes we would make up
songs to help memorize things. This technique made math so much easier for
everyone in the class. Songs in primary also have a similar purpose. The songs
teach basic doctrines in ways children can remember. I still have most of the
Scripture Mastery memorized from Old and New Testament because our teacher used
songs to help us memorize. On the other hand, for Book of Mormon and D&C we
rarely used the songs and I barely remember them. If children were in a music
class, the more they would turn to songs to help with memory like I did.
This is one example of a song made to help with memory-
Music has always been huge part of the LDS Church.
It helps the Saints worship and inspires people to improve. “Music can set an
atmosphere of worship that invites the spirit of revelation, of testimony.”
President Boyd K. Packer said. I’m not saying that everyone needs to be perfect
at singing but I do believe everyone should have the basic knowledge of the
notes. Music classes teach you how to better stay with the beat and give you
more confidence. If more people had some type of music lessons then many would
not be as scared to sing in front of people.
Being in a band, orchestra or choir also gives you
many leadership experiences. Having these leadership opportunities will help
later in life when looking and applying for a job. It teaches children to be
responsible for themselves and others. It also makes them work as a team.
Another reason it is important to learn how to play
an instrument or to sing is that it helps us better understand ourselves. Being
part of a choir or play an instrument helps children express their emotions as
they grow up. It makes us appreciate the work that the artists put into a piece
of music and recognize why so many people may love it. After taking a music
class last semester my feelings about certain music changed drastically. I was
able to better understand what the composer was trying to do and the feelings
they were trying to convey to the listener.
Music is everywhere. We hear it almost constantly: in restaurants, on
the street, in church and many other places. Some can’t study with out music.
It is a useful tool that allows us to detach from the world and let us feel emotions
that we otherwise could not. Happy songs can improve our mood and many even bring
us to tears. It sparks imagination and helps us use both sides of the brain.
Participating in a music group would not only help the musician, but also
inspire children everywhere.
